she floats just beneath the ocean’s waves
her brown hair spread like a scallop seashell.
her gaze, fixed on the profile of a white sun
that disturbed the surrounding blue-green waters
with flecks of white light, surrendered
to a warmth that blanketed her face.
unaware of what lies above,
she lifts her hand and breaks the ocean
feels the sun’s kiss–an eruption of heat
that envelops her hand.
the mermaid said
she discovered peace.
I like how you used so many words that were disruptive to describe a changing experience leading to peace!
Thank you Hellen! I’m glad you understood what I was trying to convey haha
This is so beautiful! Could you comment on my poem?
https://miraclestonight.wordpress.com/angelic-demons/
Thank you for your kind words. I will stop by!
Yet again, I feel spellbound after reading it! I hope I am able to do justice to it by getting what you intended. The mermaid discovered peace by coming out of her comfort zone and journeying into the unknown, by overcoming its fear. Inspiring and lovely. 🙂
That was what I had intended! However, my intention doesnt matter as much as what you get from it. Thank you for your kind words. It means a great deal to me
You are a lovely author. There is so much to learn from you as a beginner 🙂
I am a beginner myself! I am still learning and experimenting in so many different arenas.
That’s good to know 😀 Looking forward to explore new arenas with you. Keep creating. Have a great day ahead (I am not sure about the time there, its about 3 am here) 😀
Same to you! And in the U.S. it’s about 4pm. Hope you have a great day too
Now this is why I want to go to the sea 😀 Beautiful as always.
Thank you! I love the ocean–I actually wrote this based on a dream I had.
I love the ocean too and dream about it quite a lot! Even though I haven’t been there in a long while. I want to visit it sometime in the next few months though–it’s an eight hour ride by bus from our city but I’m hoping to make it happen. Fingers crossed.
Wow, it is certainly a long drive for you! But I’m sure it will be worth it to go take a look, especially if you haven’t before. It will also make an interesting blog post! 😉
I know right? Haha.