dirty polyester stretches across the sky
and its soft, water droplets caress the earth—shy kisses
erupt like the rings of a tree stump on black,
glittered pavements. the imprints of these caresses
drum the edges of my window, crooning
me to sleep.
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oh wow. that first line just melts on the tongue… and the delight continues throughout. wonderful, wonderful work. thank you for sharing!
Aww, thank you–your comment means a lot to me. Thank YOU for reading! 🙂 I’m so glad you enjoyed it.
Beautiful piece– please keep writing! 🙂 and the phrase “sky kisses erupt” is incredible with its tension it contains. 😀
Awww 🙂 your comment made me smile. Thank you. You’re too kind. ❤
This is so pretty–I had to reread it like four times to really get your vision 🙂
Totally off topic but I’ve noticed that when you comment on my posts it’s either early morning here (6am), or early evening (5-6pm). This has made me curious: what time zone are you in? Here in Nairobi we’re in GMT+3 😀 I only ask because I find it so fascinating how you can be communicating with someone from around the world thinking you’re in the same place and time only you really aren’t! Especially with the time thing, haha!
Thank you 🙂 I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Ooh, I have wondered about that too! I just googled it right now. When I lived in Los Angeles (a week ago) you were six hours ahead–but now that I moved you are four hours ahead of me! Crazy how time works. It is amazing that we are communicating even though we are so far away from each other! 🙂
Wow! So does that mean you blog in the middle of the night because sometimes when we’re chatting at the same time it’s very early in the morning here 😀 😀 😀 And you’re right–time is amazing! It’s like you’re in the past and I’m in the future, haha ;D
Yeah! Sometimes I do scroll through my feed before I fall asleep. Right now its 12:40am 🙂 and yes I heard time is our only true unit of measurement. & hahaha that’s true! Maybe u can tell me how my day will go haha
What? Then that must mean we’re a whole 8 hours ahead of you because it’s 8:56 AM here! Crazy! I best let you get to sleep now 😀 And yes, I will speak to you of your future when you wake up 😉 😉 ❤ ❤
Whoops I got my times wrong, haha. I shouldn’t do the math myself next time. But whoa, 8 hours ahead? That’s crazy! I’m tripping out right now. And yes 🙂 It’s Thursday now 🙂 ❤
oh my! this is so creative! lovely lovely lovely 🙂
i wish i was as good at poetry as you are!! xx
Aww you’re too sweet! Thank you! 🙂 I’ve been practicing and just trying out different things. I’m sure you can do it too, being the fabulous writer that you are 🙂
haha ive been feeling really insecure these days so that comment def made me feel better ❤
I’m glad! I’ve been feeling insecure about writing lately (I’m not sure if that’s what bringing the feeling of insecurity for you, too).But, it’s important to remember that writing is a journey, the things we post will not always be our best–but that we need to practice so that we can get better. We write for others but also for our own personal growth. Your writing is beautiful, the images you create are always lovely to read–but if you don’t feel that way, I understand. I feel that way about my own work, too. But, we must remember that we should also write for ourselves because if we write too much for others our thoughts and feelings towards certain things change (at least for me). I hope you feel better ❤
Aw this was the sweetest thing ever! you’re definitely right! I usually write for myself to make me feel better and stuff but sometimes I get too focused on others..and that’s what really brings my confidence down.
you’re an incredible writer and a great person ❤ thank you :)xxx
I hope you feel better. And thank you so much. 🙂 Keep writing xx ❤
you too ❤ xxx